You don’t listen anymore
You don’t offer your heart
You don’t smile
when I walk through the door
We’re together, yet, so far apart
You don’t bring flowers
at the end of the day
You look right through me
when I have words to say
You don’t kiss me
hello or good-bye
My head is spinning with questions
I ask myself, “why?”
Where have you gone
What have I done
What happened to us
I ask you because
I still love you
© LScott 2012
Author’s note: Fiction
Baydreamer ~ Lauren Scott 
Wow. This is powerful. I can see this in my mind with such clarity. Thank you for sharing this. You must tell me when you discover “why”
Thank you so much, VW! I didn’t realize this would have the impact it has had and just so you know, this is fiction only! I know you’ve seen my other romantic poems to know I am truly happily married! As to the “why” I’m sure there’s no clear cut answer for everyone! 🙂
Ahh! We do become familiar with our loved ones rather too much, don’t we? Take them for granted. Yet, if we took them away, or imagine they’re not there… what a void there would be in our lives. Lovely.
You’re so right, David, and thank goodness this is fiction for me! You’ll see my other comment to everyone…but thank you for your kind words and comment. With your talent, I always appreciate your feedback!
Wow, beautiful poem Lauren! I can feel your emotions in this one. God Bless 🙂
Thanks, PJ, and please read my other comment to everyone; you’ll know this is only fiction and true to my life! I should have added that in the beginning! 🙂
Know this one:)
Awww. sorry, Neel! I replied to everyone that this is fiction, but I feel most of us can relate at some time in our life. I only wish (for my hubby’s sake) that I had added a disclaimer in the beginning, so I’m repeating myself! I hope your experience is in the past, far, far away and that you’re okay now! 🙂
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
This is so powerful, Lauren! Love it!
Deb xx
Thanks, Deb, it’s not real, though, only fiction, just so you know! I have many romantic poems where my hubby is the main character! 🙂 xx
A very emotional poem, Lauren, and a synchronisity with the poem I posted on divorce today. It’s like you have captured the other side. This is what I heard and what made it so hard to leave. It’s almost like you were there…
Very beautifully penned, my friend.
Thanks, Angela, I’ll read yours later, too, and I’m sorry you experienced that! I’m sure you’ll see my comment to everyone, but this is truly fiction. My hubby and I are going on 23 years of marriage this month, so all is fine! Thanks so much for your beautiful comment; you always encourage me, which is wonderful! Hugs!
Oh, dear–this one makes me nervous. Love and hugs to you, Lauren.
I didn’t mean to make you nervous, Caddo,this is just a fictional piece of writing, that I’m sure many can relate to; it doesn’t pertain to me at all…thanks for your hugs!
I’m very relieved! And–I’ve had the experience recently of readers thinking what I’ve written is currently pertinent to my life, when it may not be so. I considered “explaining” every post, but that would kind of ruin the creative mood I’m trying to set with poetic images–though I did add the “decades old” part to older work.
And yes, I very well relate to what your fictional poem conveyed–which is why I got “nervous”. It’s painful and anxiety-producing when things begin to change in an intimate relationship. I LOVE your writing very much, as I do relate to so much of it. There are a number of us “blog sisters” who seem to have lived parallel lives–or maybe none of us is quite as unique as we think ourselves!
Anyhow, I still send bunches of hugs–and will see you again soon! God bless you.
“You look right through me
when I have words to say”….O o when words fail and warmth disappears…lovely poem Lauren
Thanks so much, Soma! I’m sure you’ll see my other comment, as well, but this is fiction only, not true to my life. I have to protect my hubby! 🙂 But, it is true maybe for some at some time…sad, but true~ Thanks, always, for your support! Hugs!
Lots of emotion… I feel this in myself. Beautiful.
Thanks so much for your kind words~
Oh, you just broke my heart for you, Lauren! Sometimes, my husband SEEMS to be looking right through me when I speak (how can I blame him, with a chatty wife such as I!). Sometimes, he forgets to kiss hello and goodbye, almost always because he is finishing something he insists on doing for me. However, Lauren, I do appreciate your mastery in very masterfully describing these events, or lack thereof, in the lives of gazillions of couples around the world. I find that it is actually helpful to get these kinds of words right out there in the open.
Oh, Rose, I hope you read my other comment to everyone…this is only fiction and doesn’t pertain to me. I am truly blessed with my husband and best friend of just about 23 years of marriage (Jan 21st). Anyway, thank you so much for opening up to me and for your concern and kind words! I should have written a disclaimer in the beginning; I’ve learned my lesson! I do feel that many of us can relate to this at some time, unfortunately! I also think most are used to reading my “up” poetry and maybe this was a shocker! 🙂 I’d love to hear more feedback from you!
Oh gosh…. this sounds so familiar. Yet I still FEEL loved, in spite of things, and I hope you’re still feeling that too. I agree with what Granbee said – “gazillions of couples” can relate to this and I’m thankful for your sharing – and getting it “right out there in the open”.
Oh, Betty, I hope you see my other comment to everyone! I should have added a disclaimer in the beginning, that this is only fiction, and I have now learned my lesson! Of course, people close to me have experienced this, so I draw off of others experiences. But, right now and for the last (almost) 23 years, I’ve been blessed with my wonderful hubby! Thank you so much, though, for your kind words and your concern! xx
Hi Everyone,
After reading a few of the comments, I just have to clarify that this is fiction and doesn’t pertain to me right now. I’m sure many of us can relate to this at some time in our lives, but I think you’ve seen from my other romantic poetry that I’m happily married (will be 23 years on Jan 21st)! I’ll respond individually, as well, but I needed to get this out in the open! Thanks for all your comments! (I should have added a disclaimer; lesson learned) 🙂
Lauren xx
this is amazing. sucked me right in and so relatable. perfect, as always 🙂
Thanks, Elle, sorry you can relate, but I’m many of us can at some time. It is fiction for me at the present time, though, just so you know! 🙂
I figured this was a fictional piece, and I’m glad to hear that it is. Wonderfully written, though! I love poems that convey emotion, and you capture the feeling on uncertainty perfectly. 🙂
Thanks so much, Tim! 🙂
I nominated you for the versatile bloggers award :_)
http://alizaswindow.wordpress.com/2012/01/06/the-versatile-blogger-award-yyaaaaaaaayyyy/
Thank you so much, Aliza, and I’m honored to receive this nomination from you. I will follow through over the weekend, when my job doesn’t interfere! 🙂 Thanks again!
So many people have related to your words – this is where your strengths are in your writing, touching depths.
Forgive .. I of course meant touching deeply. ❤
Awww…thanks, Pam! Your words really are encouraging and they humble me~xx
I’m turning 49 in a few weeks, 2 daughters 18 and 21, I’ve been married 26 years, been together 33 years (high school sweethearts), so we have a lot in common… the difference is that you can write beautifully, and I sadly cannot! Wonderful writing and probably true at one point or another for most.
Wow, your love story is remarkable and I’m so happy for you! Staying together, happily, that long is rare these days, so it’s wonderful to hear positive feedback! And…thanks for your very kind words, which humble me! I wrote this, drawing from others experiences and even my own from many moons ago, before my hubby and I met. I assume we all have stepping stones…I will visit your blog, soon, too! Thanks again for taking the time to stop by and comment! 🙂
i really love it, Lauren!
Great work!!!
Thanks, Nanda! I appreciate your complement! 🙂
Sometimes we wonder where love has gone, but the way of expressing love changes from person to person as we grow old.
Very beautiful poem indeed.
Thank you very much for your insightful and kind comment! 🙂
You are so fortunate for what is fiction for you is so true for others. Wish everyone could be as fortunate as you.
I am fortunate, however, I have felt this way in past relationships. I met my hubby when I was 26, so I had some growing to do before committing to “forever.” But, I am grateful, believe me, and I wish this kind of love for everyone, if that is what is desired. Thanks, Sandra, I wish you much happiness, my friend! xx