Visions from
yesteryear struggle
to remain
paramount
descending farther into
anonymity
Is it right
to lighten the grip?
dilemma
a moment
to weigh varied directions
path free of error
Lauren Scott © 2017
(This is another contribution for Eliot’s November Shadorma challenge.)
https://alongtheinterstice.wordpress.com/2017/11/14/to-do-list/
Baydreamer Writes ~ Lauren Scott, Author & Poet 
Lighten the grip.. Ah so much to contemplate with this one, Lauren!
The answer still isn’t clear though, Christy. 🙂
I can relate to the question in this, Lauren! Nicely written once again. 🙂
Thanks, Betty, and I’m glad you can relate. I’m still pondering. 🙂
Our memories from the past always have a strong influence on us.
I agree, Binky! Thanks for your feedback!
“In doing good, avoid fame. In doing bad, avoid disgrace. Pursue a middle course
as your principle. Thus you will guard your body from harm, preserve your life,
fulfil your duties by your parents, and live your allotted span of life.” – Chuang Tzu.
What happened to line 11 and its 7 syllables?
Great advice from Chuang Tzu. And what can I say, Ben? A second pair of eyes comes in handy. I double-checked this a million times and still didn’t catch that. It’s corrected and now I gracefully bow and take a step back. 🙂
Thanks again!
You are not alone. Earlier today I noticed that one of the shadormas I posted recently had an error in it. (Now corrected.) Then later I saw that one I posted today had been cutnpasted with the final line missing. (Now corrected.) Big red face. 😳
Okay, that makes me feel much better because embarrassment definitely entered the scenario. 🙂
Then my plan to help you feel better worked. Good. 😉
Thank you, Ben. 🙂
POO BAG
When (s)he fears
(S)he may’ve made a mess
(Too often
(S)he’s afraid)
Even if no one saw still
Likes to clear it up
Precisely. And thanks for the smile! 🙂
Seems we have this little foible in common, Lauren. 🙂 Glad it gave you a smile.
(And thanks for the new shadorma. I’m attempting to birth 60 this month so any assistance is welcome. 🙂 )
Oh my gosh, Ben, you are cranking them out. So, you don’t need any assistance. I, on the other hand, am digging for inspiration and suddenly fearing syllables. 😀
You were my inspiration here. Others’ posts often inspire me, It might work for you too?
Okay, I’m happy to provide inspiration then, and I do often become inspired by others’ writing, too. So, thank you! 🙂
I only mentioned this because you spoke of digging for inspiration. When we remain alert we see inspiration everywhere don’t we? 🙂
We sure do, and I’m still digging. 🙂 One shadorma at a time, and your comments and feedback are always appreciated, Ben…
Thank you. 🙂
Those are interesting statements that could take us in several directions. Memories/visions can make us happy, sad or at the extreme terrified. They may fade for a time but do surface to prompt these potential emotions.
We never know if it’s right, do we? The past has often far too much power over us and I also struggle to keep it at bay 😉
Beautifully crafted shadorma, Lauren! 😄😚💖
Thanks again, Sarah, and for all your visits! 🙂 Yes, sometimes what to do just isn’t clear enough, you know what I mean? 🙂 Sending hugs ❤💜💙