Dear Friends,
This is only a practice Sonnet and for someone who writes about romance quite often (if you know me), a love Sonnet just wouldn’t work this time. So I incorporated one of my husband’s dreams and one of mine and created this. I mainly focused on Sonnet rules, rather than an enticing subject, so your feedback or critiquing is welcomed. If you notice any bloopers, don’t be shy, let me know. I’m learning, as this is a new adventure and of course, I hope this brings a smile, too!
Nonsensical Dreams (Sonnet)
Upon the hill resides a house so great,
Around each corner, hallways run for miles,
The rooms alone are like the size of lakes,
The space indeed creates a million smiles.
Inside its walls roam creatures of all kinds,
From lemurs to giraffes as tall as skies,
The scene itself completely redefines,
What should be truly isn’t all the time.
But just as quick as grins begin to form,
Fear takes their place abounding all around,
Cold sweats and shivers enter like a storm,
As spiders creep, the heart begins to pound.
Yet, as the sun begins to show its light,
Relief sets in erasing all the fright.
Lauren Scott © 2014
Baydreamer ~ Lauren Scott 
Oh I love this Lauren! And well done too! As you know I only wrote my fiirst sonnet a while ago. I didn’t find it that easy but I did find it very satisfying, and for a while after I could only think in sonnets! Ive written one more but thats all. This is great and flows really well. I really do love it . ❤️ Xx
Thanks so much, Chris! I remember your sonnet and loved it. You also inspired me to try! I find them very challenging and this is the first time I could actually complete one, even though it wasn’t a serious subject. So for that reason, I was happy. 🙂 I’m glad you think it’s okay, too! Your opinion means a lot to me! ♥ xo
I think its nice to write some lighthearted ones. Sonnets can be a bit stuffy! Dont tell anyone I said that! lol 😊❤️ Xx
I won’t! 😉 ♥
😊❤️ xx
I love this, Lauren…it’s awesome. I don’t know much about writing and the rules to it, but what you wrote is wonderful.
Love and hugs xxx
Thanks, Deb! I have been trying to write a Sonnet for awhile but with no success. They’re challenging for me, so at least I feel now that I have a better understanding and will try again for a more serious tone…love and hugs to you, too! xoxo
I am always so confident when it comes to reading your words…all that you deliver always comes to life so very beautifully. You have made my morning Lauren, my sister! Your words always give birth to refreshing smiles! God bless you and your family!
Wendell, your words have me speechless! Thank you so much, my friend, for all you said. You have made my evening! 🙂 Your poetry has the same effect on me….I send hugs and blessings to you and your family, too!
Loved this Lauren, to keep the mood flowing and the words too in a composed way is difficult in sonnet. You managed pretty well.
Aww, I’m glad, Soumyav, and thank you! I’ve been working on misc. Sonnets for weeks and nothing has worked. I’ve only succeeded in getting frustrated, so I was happy to at least finish this and have a better understanding, even though it’s not a beautiful love Sonnet. 🙂
Very pictures and associable; it’s an “A+” Lauren.
Thanks, Steve! I couldn’t ask for anything better than an A+ (even though I don’t think it’s worthy of that), but I’ll take it, nonetheless! 🙂 I appreciate your feedback!
I really liked it!
I’m so glad, Iris! Thank you and I hope you had a great weekend! ♥
impressive – detailed – well balanced!
Thanks so much, Mihrank! I truly appreciate your positive and encouraging feedback!
It takes a lot of tinkering to construct a sonnet. I have a couple and am constantly reworking them. You did well with yours.
You are so right, Ian! This is the first completed Sonnet after many I’ve started and have trashed. 🙂 Keep working on yours and I can’t wait to read them. Thanks for your positive comment!
I don’t know the structure of a sonnet, but it sounded good to me.
Well, I appreciate your kind words no matter what, Binky, so thank you!
your poetry always resonates Lauren, nicely done here as always.
Thanks so much, John! Coming from you, that is a great complement and I appreciate the encouragement!
Well done, Lauren. I love it!
I have a habit of checking syllables in everyone’s sonnets lol. Sitting here with 10 fingers popping up while reading lol. Yours is whimsical and fun to read too
Thanks so much, Scott! Coming from you, that’s a BIG complement! 🙂 And I have to admit doing the same thing, counting on my fingers before clicking on the publish button. lol Hopefully, a love sonnet will come to mind in the near future now…
COO-WULL!!! What a great piece, Lauren. Nailed it. 😀 😀 😀
❤
Kath
Thanks, K! I’m sure you’ve already nailed sonnets down with your writing talent! This took awhile, but now it’s time for a more serious, romantic tone. I hope I can nail it again! 😀 xo ♥
Wow! Great sonnet.
Thanks, Michelle! It was fun and challenging and now, I’m working on a love sonnet. Cross your fingers and I hope this brought you some smiles. 🙂
I enjoyed that writing Lauren, it was quite a refreshing reading.
Words with imagery that leads into a little fear that dissipates with the first rays of sunshine.
Beautiful.
Emu
Thanks so much, Ian..I couldn’t come up with a serious love sonnet, so I thought some silly dreams could make everyone smile. 🙂 I’m glad I understand better how a sonnet is written now for next attempt. Thanks again and I’ll catch up in your world soon, too!
As You know I don’t write with any poet form. I usually create my own so no critique from me. Only that it’s beautiful and I enjoyed reading it.
I know that about you, Kim, and I usually freely write, too, but I’ve wanted to try a sonnet and for the longest time, I couldn’t! So, this one may be silly, but I understand the rules a little better and now am working on a love sonnet. Wish me luck! 🙂 Thanks for your kind complement and I’m glad you enjoyed it, too! Hugs!
I don’t know the rules of writing poetry, just the same, I enjoyed it. All the best with all that you are working on. ♥
Thanks, Renee! I usually just write freely, but have always wanted to try a sonnet and glad I finally did. Not that it’s a good one, but at least I have a better understanding of what is involved. 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it, my friend…♥
Traditional forms of poetic verse are challenging but quite rewarding in their master. This has a nice feel to it Lauren. I haven’t written a sonnet for some time now and really should challenge myself again…perhaps a weekend project!
Hi Don,
I’m working on another sonnet and referred back to this, then found your comment that I missed years ago. How does that happen? I’m so sorry! You’re always so nice, taking the time to comment on my posts, and then I miss one. 😦 Anyway, thank you, and I think it’s time to challenge myself again. How about you? I don’t recall reading a sonnet of yours, unless I missed it, too. Hope all is well!