like a grandpa
and dear friend to the
boy’s grandma, Mabel, at
a time when she persevered
through an unforgettable loss.
Sounds of war vibrated ruthlessly.
Women were placed in subordinate roles.
A pocket watch, timeless in its essence,
a present, golden in tone and worth.
Locomotive chugs down the tracks,
a couple turns makes it tick,
heartbeat of fifty years.
© Lauren Scott, baydreamerwrites – All rights reserved.
79 thoughts on “The Timepiece”
Beautiful poem written and very inspiring 🌹🙏👍🏻 dear friend ✍️👏
Thank you so much, Thattamma. This one is special for my husband (the teen years ago). ❤️🤗
🙌 so lovely 😊 Thank you for sharing Dear and good wishes 🌹🙏♥️🌹
Thank you, my friend! 💐💞💐
Most welcome 🙏 my dear friend 💕🌹
So welcome 🙏❤️ ✍️ dear friend 👏
Thank you, Beth. I appreciate your lovely words. 💞
Wonderful glance back 💛
Thanks, Paula! A sentimental piece. 💗
I loved this! It captured the essence of time and a precious keepsake. The imprint of the locomotive steaming down the tracks is beautiful. Glad you shared it!
Aww, thanks so much, Diane! My husband brought the watch out the other night and I was inspired to write. I love that locomotive too. Edward was a machinist on locomotives in the 30s, 40s, and 50s, so had a strong affinity to all trains. I’m so glad you enjoyed this bit of our family history. ❤️
Lauren! This is a beautiful poem! I love it! ❤
Thanks very much, Carol anne! I’m happy to know that you loved this sentimental poem. ❤️
Thank you, Andrew!
Beautiful words and the watch too.
Thank you very much, Lakshmi. 🙏🏻
I just passed my grandfather’s watch to my daughter, so I know how important these pieces are. Thanks, Lauren.
Wow, John, is that perfect timing or what (no pun intended)? 🙂 My husband brought the watch out the other night and I immediately thought to write about it. I’m sure your daughter will treasure your grandfather’s watch as well. ❤️
Yes she will. Thanks, Lauren.
What form is this poem? It works very well to convey the symmetry of our lives and memories.
Hi Liz, this is an etheree poem and my first attempt! Thank you so much! I’m also categorizing it as ekphrastic poetry. Correct me if I’m wrong. I’m trying to step out of my comfort zone. 🙂
You’re welcome! It’s always good to step out of our comfort zone, poetically speaking. Strictly speaking, ekphrastic poetry is inspired by a work of art. I would say your poem is closer to photopoetry, in which a photograph and a poem work together to tell a story. https://www.readpoetry.com/photopoetry-photography-poetry/
Oh my gosh, thanks, Liz. I can’t believe I missed that tiny detail, work of art. 🙂 But I appreciate the link and clarification. I’m glad you enjoyed this poem. 💕
You’re welcome, Lauren. 🙂 I didn’t know that photopoetry was an actual genre until recently.
I didn’t know until you told me. 🙂
Etheree poetry, stellar. Ekphrastic, stupendous by all angles in that this has heart and memory: love love love this. Thanks for sharing. Just beautiful, dear, Lauren. Thanks.
Thanks for your wonderful words, Selma! I’m wrong about ekphrastic poetry though because that style involves a work of art. 🙂 So Liz pointed out that this is more of photo poetry. It’s good to learn something new, and to step out of our comfort zones. 🙂 Thanks again, dear friend. ❤️
I was touched by the message and love the shape. Good job Lauren!
Thanks, Sharon! ❤️
Thanks so much, Sadje. 💗
You’re most welcome
A moving post, Lauren. 💗 There is great symbolism and nostalgia in a pocket watch.
Thanks for your kind words, Michele, and the symbolism and nostalgia provided inspiration. I’m glad you enjoyed this poem. ❤️
You are welcome. 😊 Your post reminded me of my brother inheriting my (maternal) grandfather’s pocket watch. Very special. ❤️
I’m glad my post evoked that special memory, Michele. 🤗❤️
In times passed that was an item considered quite expensive and therefor a treasured item to be passed along to the next generation. In a sense we do that with the children we produce.
So true, Ian. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
I love the form and beauty of this poem. ❤️
Thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words. 💖
Lauren, a beautiful poem. Heartfelt. The pocket watch is beautiful too, wrapped in Edward and a piece of your family history. xXx 🌹💕🌹
Thanks, Jane. Your comment alone is a poetic response that I appreciate very much. Sending hugs 🤗❤️🌻
The arrow of time… such a beautiful and moving poem, Lauren! xoxoxoxo
Thanks, Marina! I was inspired when my husband brought the watch out one evening. 🙂 Hugs 💕🌻💕
Kudos to both then! 😉
Many hugs back! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
My grandfather worked on trains for a while.
So did Edward, Binky. He loved all trains. 🙂
Thank you for sharing!
Thank you for visiting, Helen! 💗
It’s my pleasure!
So many wonderful comments!
Thank you Honey.
Brings back so many great memories of Edward and Grandma…and the gift 💝
A beautiful poem, Lauren. I love the way you connected the pocket watch to memories and the passage of time. Lovely.
Thanks so much, Diana. That’s exactly what I wanted to convey. And this is my first attempt at an Etheree poem. Not easy, but I plan to try again. It’s fun to step out of the box. 🙂 Have a good day! 💗
I love the added challenge of syllabic poetry and find them harder than they look! You nailed it. I hope you do more of them.
Thanks, Diana. I’ll try more and hope for the best. 🙂 I agree…they’re harder than they look! Happy almost Friday! 💞
Loving the way time threads the memories of this piece together and utilizes a shape that comes full circle. 🙂
Thanks for your lovely words, Layla. I’m glad you enjoyed these memories. 🥰
Hi Lauren, I love this poem and I also love the pictures. It reads as if it is based on a true story.
Thanks so much, Robbie. This is my husband’s story. He brought the watch out one evening and I was inspired to write. And I wanted to try a new form, an etheree poem. 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed. 💞
Time is so precious and so are memories, as well as things that means a lot for us.
Very nice poem Lauren. We feel your care in it.
And well done for a new form of poem! You did great !
Have a lovely weekend 💗
Thanks so much, Marie. I appreciate your lovely words. It’s always fun to try a new format, but this one wasn’t easy. 🙂 And you’re so right about time and memories. Have a lovely weeekend too! ❤️🌺
Such an awesome and profound poem, Lauren. Time is always precious and so are our memories. Great post.
Thanks very much, Kamal. I’m glad you enjoyed this bit of our family history. Have a wonderful weekend. ❤️💐
Yes awesome Lauren. You too have a wonderful weekend 😊😊😊
A lovely, “timeless” poem. So evocative!
Thank you, Pam. I appreciate your beautiful words! ❤️
I really love how you honor the past and present here, the ticking of the clock. Beautifully penned.
Thanks for your beautiful words, Bridgette. It’s wonderful how writing inspiration arrives from all different elements and angles of life. 💗
Gorggeous reflections of time and no better way to convey them than a pocket watch Lauren. I covet my Grandmothers as well as my Grandfather’s.💞
Thanks, Cindy! I’m glad you can relate to a precious gift of a pocket watch. And I appreciate your wonderful comment. Hope you have a great weekend! ❤️❤️
You’re so welcome dear Lauren. Happy weekend to you as well! 💗
This brings back the most moving moments of my own family and relatives long lost to the heavens above. I have framed pictures/portraits throughout my home that are such a heartwarming reminder that those you love are never really lost; they remain close to my heart forevermore. Lovely expression here, Lauren.
I’m happy my words resonated with you, Don. My husband brought the watch out one evening and inspiration tapped me on the shoulder. We also have many photos around the house. But our loved ones live inside of us forever. ❤️