I watch him
Sitting in the sand
His quest for
Shines through the look on his face
A slight breeze
Blows his light brown hair
As he digs
My heart warms from his delight
A precious moment
Lauren Scott 2017
(I learned about this poetry form at Ben’s site,
https://bennaga.wordpress.com/ and he encouraged
me to try a Shadorma, as well. I couldn’t think
of a new topic, so I revised an old poem from
when my son was little. ❤ I hope you enjoy, and
thanks for the nudge, Ben. It’s always good to
learn something new.)
28 thoughts on “Little Beach Boy (A Shadorma)”
RESPONSE AS PROMISED
You did good
You did good, Lauren
Not as if
I’ve followed your work for years
And shall continue
Wow, thanks so much, Ben! What a lovely comment and compliment and as a Shadorma even…I’m truly humbled…
Well deserved. 🙂
I agree with Ben, Lauren. I wouldn’t have thought it was your first try at a shadorma. Hugs, dear friend.
Aww, thanks, Michelle! I had writer’s block about a topic though, but I loved going back in time to this day. As I told Ben, I’m truly humbled by your comment. Hugs to you, too, my friend!
I don’t know anything about types of poetry, but I like this one of yours.
That’s nice to say, Binky, thank you! 🙂
Oh that poem took me to happy childhood times at the beach, and later the pleasure of watching my own children enjoy that experience. There’s something special about the ocean and all those wonderful discoveries in the sand and rocks.
Your comment just made my day, Ian, because your reaction is one that I wanted to accomplish by writing this poem. It wasn’t just for my reminiscent benefit. So, thank you, and I’m glad you enjoyed!
Very pleasing, visual poem about your son, Lauren. I haven’t yet tried a Shadorma but have been seeing them everywhere lately. You’ve inspired me now to give it a try. (Soon…) Ben’s a great teacher!
Thanks so much, Betty, and I know yours will be wonderful, as well, because of the beautiful writer you are. Yes, Ben is a great teacher! 🙂 I look forward to reading yours when you’re ready, too. Hugs.
Thanks for the encouragement – I might do what you did to start with and find an older poem to “re-fit”. 😁
It’s an easy way to begin. 😊
I did it – posted a little while ago. It ended up being fun. (I used some scribbled notes from an unfinished poem written two days ago and had fun carving it into a Shadorma.) Thanks again for giving me the little nudge I needed. 🤗💞
Oh, great! I’ll check it out and you’re welcome! It is fun, and I’ve written two more also. 😊❤️
Will be watching for yours! (Am behind reading, as usual. 😊❣️ )
I haven’t posted either yet, so relax. 🙂 I know, keeping up with the emails is the tough part. I love reading others’ posts, but it’s challenging…💓
I admit it – I don’t know what a Shadorma is either, but will have to go study it. But I DO know that I like your poem. In writing, I truly don’t think it matters if we’re writing about a present time, or one from the past or even the future. When we write it…. it is NOW.
I was standing there, watching your son play in the sand – N O W. And it brought a smile to my face.
Thanks, Pam! It’s been awhile since I learned a new poetry form, so this was fun. I’m glad my first try was accepted in a positive way. I also agree with what you said about writing in the past, present, or future being ultimately NOW. Very profound. It’s great that you had an enjoyable visual while reading, as well. Thanks again! 💕
Lovely, Lauren! ❤
Thank you, Bette! This is a fun form to write, but recalling those memories with my son is even better. Have a good weekend! 💓
Yes, and we can easily capture precious moments – thanks to technology 🙂
There’s a positive for technology, Eric! Have a great weekend! 🙂
Aww – it´s as if I could see this scene right before my eyes! You don´t need a brush to paint the loveliest of images, Lauren, your words are all you need! 🙂 xoxo ❤
Thanks so much, Sarah, for your kind and beautiful comment. Sometimes, those words come easily, and other times, they’re like pulling teeth. 🙂 Recalling these precious moments with my son though made writing this poem pretty easy. Have a lovely weekend! 💕
My pleasure, Lauren. 😀 And thank you again for sharing this beautiful memory with your son with us! Have a lovely week ahead! 😀 💕