So many of earth’s elements, like the tides, whisper to us. I really like imagining, with you, that the more we dig our bare toes into the sands of time, the more we will hear of Creation! Wonderful, wonderful post, Lauren!
i have been reading your haiku. usually i am not a fan of haiku in 5-7-5 form because it is too wordy, and does not follow Japanese tradition. but, you do make it work.
the next time i update my links section on my page, i will be adding your page.
haiku, in english, shoul follow the short-long-short format. not a syllable count. in the Japanese language they don’t have syllables. what they do have are sound units.
an example would be the word HAIKU. in english it is two syllables. HAI-KU. in japanese, it would be THREE sound units: HA-I-KU.
so, in japanese, the 5-7-5 sound unit pattern does not translate well to english syllables. does that make sense?
your haiku work. there are no extra, or un-needed words. the only thing i would suggest are devices that act as japanese cutting words. if you want to know about that, let me know.
Thanks for your haiku information! I have done some research and read about the 5-7-5 syllables, but haven’t seen anything about the sound units, so thank you! I’ll give this some thought~I’m glad you’ve enjoyed what you’ve read and hope you’ll return again!
Lauren
Thanks so much, Betty..I’m ready for the beach, but haven’t had the chance, yet! And thanks for your very encouraging words, too! I do appreciate them! 🙂
Thanks so much, Scott, and I’m glad you found a deeper meaning in this…the beach is very romantic and my hubby and I were able to get away last fall. ironically, our reservations fell right at the time we rec’d the bad news. Our kids told us to go anyway, as we needed some time alone and we ended up having a great time. I think they needed some time to process, too, without the parents around…anyway… 🙂
Baydreamer ~ Lauren Scott 
The beach can be so peaceful. Excellently summed up.
Yes, it can be, thanks so much, Joe! 🙂
very beautiful, Lauren xox
Thanks, Francina! xoxo
Lovely 🙂
Thanks so much, Boomie! 🙂
A haiku for summer. The ocean is calling me today. It’s not far away. I do believe it is time for me to go and dig my toes deep in the sand. Virginia
I hope you’re able to visit the ocean soon, Virginia! Thank you!
OH, love it. I constant see His face or hear His voice in nature – no matter how distracted i am by things i should have surrendered . . .
Thank you, Martha, and I do, too! He is all around us! xx
I am really feeling it this morning.
That’s wonderful, Martha, may He bless you with much happiness today!
😉
I love this, I wish for the beach and the ocean, yet feel it through your poetry, Love to you, Linda
Oh, thank you, Linda, I haven’t been to the beach, yet, this summer, but will plan a trip before summer’s end~love and hugs to you!
A beautiful haiku to match this beautiful beach Lauren! It looks so very inviting, too! 🙂
Thanks, Gabby, it does look inviting, doesn’t it? We haven’t been, yet, but will plan to, as I’m in the mood for some toe dipping in sand! 🙂
So many of earth’s elements, like the tides, whisper to us. I really like imagining, with you, that the more we dig our bare toes into the sands of time, the more we will hear of Creation! Wonderful, wonderful post, Lauren!
Awww…thanks, Rose, your comment is just beautiful! xx
Excellent, beautiful–and familiar to my heart!
Thanks so much, Caddo! xx
Reminds me. I’m 3 miles from Miami Beach and have not been there for years.
Awww…Carl, you need to take time out for some peace and ocean whispers! 🙂
Stunning …
yes the waves have been calling my name for a long time now..i have to let them caresses my senses…
beautiful poetry Lauren..
Thanks, Soma, doesn’t the ocean sound inviting right now? Have a beautiful day! xo
So delightful, Lauren!
Thanks, Peg! 🙂
Lovely!
Thanks so much, Kim!
My heart said it is…perfect! Much love to you Lauren!
Aww..thanks, Wendell, you made my day and much love to you, too! 🙂
Oh, I love this one, Lauren! Beautiful! Sending you hugs xoxo
Thanks, Deb, hugs back to you, too! xoxo
The sound of creation is beautifully peaceful and full of hope in your poetry. And who couldn’t resist the call of the sea on a hot summer day?
Awww…thanks so much, Cynthia, for your lovely comment and I have yet to visit the beach, but it is on the to-do list and on my mind~Hugs!
at the end of the second lune, i would add a pause (….). this would equal a cutting word.
Thanks, Steven, I appreciate your tips!
hi,
it’s steven, from haijinamin.com
i have been reading your haiku. usually i am not a fan of haiku in 5-7-5 form because it is too wordy, and does not follow Japanese tradition. but, you do make it work.
the next time i update my links section on my page, i will be adding your page.
haiku, in english, shoul follow the short-long-short format. not a syllable count. in the Japanese language they don’t have syllables. what they do have are sound units.
an example would be the word HAIKU. in english it is two syllables. HAI-KU. in japanese, it would be THREE sound units: HA-I-KU.
so, in japanese, the 5-7-5 sound unit pattern does not translate well to english syllables. does that make sense?
your haiku work. there are no extra, or un-needed words. the only thing i would suggest are devices that act as japanese cutting words. if you want to know about that, let me know.
i really enjoy you page!
pax et bonum,
steven
Hi Steven,
Thanks for your haiku information! I have done some research and read about the 5-7-5 syllables, but haven’t seen anything about the sound units, so thank you! I’ll give this some thought~I’m glad you’ve enjoyed what you’ve read and hope you’ll return again!
Lauren
It was perfect, Lauren! Lovely….
Celeste
Awww…thanks, Celeste! xoxo
Lauren, I totally love this haiku! Ahhhh, toes deep in the sand. 🙂 (You really do write great haiku!!!)
Thanks so much, Betty..I’m ready for the beach, but haven’t had the chance, yet! And thanks for your very encouraging words, too! I do appreciate them! 🙂
Breathless! Beautiful!
Thanks so much, Diane~
Gorgeous whispers in a gorgeous haiku!
Thanks, Christy! xo
I love that Haiku. It’s one that says much more than the words themselves, for me. The beach and ocean are the most romantic of places for me.
Thanks so much, Scott, and I’m glad you found a deeper meaning in this…the beach is very romantic and my hubby and I were able to get away last fall. ironically, our reservations fell right at the time we rec’d the bad news. Our kids told us to go anyway, as we needed some time alone and we ended up having a great time. I think they needed some time to process, too, without the parents around…anyway… 🙂